I enjoyed this. :) One nitpicky thing: You've got some issues near the end with where they're physically located. They sit down on the couch, then they're suddenly standing in the kitchen, then they're back on the couch reaching over to the coffee table. Other than that, it was great.
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Date: 2011-04-08 03:43 pm (UTC)